Just Somthing Stupid Fixed (easyer to read)

[superjosh]

here is somthing i wrote in my spare time


CH 1 THE RIVER

Tedrasil my home, a small island, A place where we live in peace with the animals. A place that is covered with trees which are used for houses (we don’t cut them down; some of the houses are in the trees). The paths are lined with smooth pebbles and dazzling blue lanterns. It is mostly dark here due to the many trees but, we have the most purest of the pure blue water. Almost everything looks blue due to the darkness. Not to far from where we live is a river, were me and Zaraceda play. My name is Zore. I’m a elf and 12 years old. I have long dark blue hair and a light purple face. My mom Zandau is a human, kind of weird but the reason she’s a human and I’m an elf is because my dad was an elf but he died before I was born. Now my best friend Zaraceda is the same age as me, he has blond hair and is a human. Like my dad his mom had died before we were born. His dad is interesting he uses magic a lot throwing fireballs and stuff like that. He is also an alcamist. He makes us lots of potations (which is what you do in alcamy), some of those potations shrink us, make us bigger, breath under water etc. now I don’t know why but he keeps his real name a secret from me and everyone including Zaraceda. So everyone calls him Scorch, Zaraceda just calls him dad.


So one day Zaraceda and I were at the river. We were just hanging out throwing rocks off the edge of the water fall. “Well I’m bored”, said Zaraceda”. “Me too”, I said “Hey Zore why do we throw rocks off the edge of the waterfall, why not swim.” “I don’t think that’s a good idea to swim this close to the water fall,” I replied. “Oh come on Zore we always swim in the river.” “Yah, but not this close to the falls.” “Come on we have some swim speed potations just in case any thing happens.” “Ok the current isn’t that strong here but don’t get to close to the falls.” Right when I said ok he quickly took off his shirt and jumped in. it was shallow not a place to swim but to sit down and relax. Come on Zore jump in, so I took off my shirt and jumped in. the current wasn’t strong but just a few inches down stream I saw a much stronger current. The water was cold but it’s always cold so I’m used to it. We like the creek because its one of the few places in Tedrasil where you can see the sky, all the other places are covered with trees. Zaraceda and I just sat there looking at the wonderful sky. But not long later I saw something weird in the sky. Several orange dots, the dots were slowly getting bigger until I could tell what they were. The dots looked like fireballs. I could tell that something had gone wrong.
















I got out of the river and took out my scope and observed the fireballs, while Zaraceda remained in the creek. The fireballs looked like it was getting closer to us. I yelled “Zaraceda get out of there.” Zaraceda stood up but was knocked off his feet when the fireball hit the water at high speeds. The current of the river had increased tremendously because of the impact of the ball of fire.” Help!” yelled Zaraceda as he was being forced down stream. So I did the first thing that came to mind I took out one of the swim speed potations and threw it towards Zaraceda. If he drank it he might be able to swim upstream and get out of the river. But I missed and it landed on the other side of the river .I was furious. I grabbed the last swim speed potation, drank it and jumped in the creek. We were close to the falls! I grabbed Zaraceda and swam as fast as I could towards the edge of the river forcing Zaraceda on land. I jumped out of the creek, Zaraceda looked frightened. He was and white as a ghost and was breathing hard. “You ok”, I asked
“Yah ill be fine”, he replied. “Thanks Zore” I looked up at the sky it was getting dark. “let’s head home its getting dark”.


To get to our homes you have to climb a small hill over the hill is where the town of Dolanar is. Just past Dolanar is m our land which is where our houses are. We put back on our shirts and began the walk over the hill. As we hit the top of the hill we expected to see the beautiful town of Dolanar. But found ashes and debris were Dolanar was. Every building has been dismantled and torn to shreds. The dead bloody body’s of close friends lay on the ground with swords and arrows stabbing into them. Tears filled Zaraceda’s eyes. I knew he was sad because, I was sad, I’m never sad. I’m not nearly as emotional as Zaraceda. At the same time I was mad I wanted to kill whoever had done this. But I was mostly worried about Zandau and Scorch. After a short silence Zaraceda started running it looked like he was running for home, I had trouble keeping up with him. When we got to the property we found burnt wood and ashes where our houses used to be. Everything we owned was gone,Zaraceda kneeled down and started to cry. “Who did this?” said Zaraceda as he was crying. “I, I don’t know” “wa where are our parents”. I tried to think where they would go. Then I thought Darnasis (Dar-nas-is). “Zaraceda where going to Darnasis”. Darnasis is the elf capital city, the only city on our island.











CH 2


The walk to Darnasis was long and quiet. I was hoping and praying that Zandau and Scorch would be there. As we entered Darnasis we saw people sleeping on the streets and around the great tree of Darnasis. Then we found them resting against the great tree of Darnasis. Right when we saw them Zaraceda jumped into Scorches arms and gave him a big hug. “Kids I’m so glad to see that you’re alive”. “Mom what happened, who attacked Dolanar and our homes?” “Well as far as I know the horde attacked us but I didn’t know why. We were lucky to survive because Scorch teleported us here. Our island is no longer safe the hordes have an encampment not to far from here and we don’t have enough warriors to fight them off. So they have declared a full evacuation of our island. We are waiting for the boat which will take us to Stormwind”. “Why are we going there?” asked Zaraceda. Stormwind is the safest city ever built by the alliance, and everyone on this island is being forced to go there. In order to get there we must cross the ocean. This will be a long trip about three to five day , And the boat will be crowded. ‘When will the boat get here?”I asked. “They said it will be some time tomorrow morning or late tonight. For now you two should get some sleep, we have a long journey ahead of us.” Zandau was right, we should get some sleep, I was starting to realize how tired I was. So I leaned against the tree and quickly fell asleep.




























CH 3


I was awoken at about 1:00 AM. “Zore, Zaraceda, the boats here.” I sat up and rubbed my eyes. It was dark, few lanterns where lit in Darnasis. It was very cold and the air was moist. “Zore hurry up and get up, the boat will be leaving soon” said Zaraceda. “I’m coming, I’m coming.” We walked down to the dock. There was a long line to get on the boat. The boat was massive but wasn’t much of a site. It was unpainted and looked torn up. When we entered the boat we found it to be very crowded and walked down some stairs into the living quarters, and found our bunks. The bunks were made of rope kind of like a hammock hanging from the ceiling. There was about 250 sets of bunks, one on top of another. I was on the top bunk and Zaraceda was below. Zandau and Scorch had the 2 bunks next to ours, we had to stay in the bunks till morning. I had a lot of trouble thinking because the bunks were uncomfortable, and I had a lot I was thinking about. What will happen to my island? Will we ever go back? So many questions, I wonder. I knew I was in for a long night.


The next morning we walked up on deck. The sun was shining and the water was a crystal blue. Breakfast was small just a slice of bread. Every thing was boring until the forth day.

























CH 4 Trouble



We were awoken with a loud bells, yelling, and water in the cabin. We knew something was wrong. The living quarters was filling up with water, we quickly ran up to the deck. The boat was rocking violently, the wind was at high speeds, it was dark and raining. Lightning filled the sky as the waves crashed on deck, and people were struggling to stay on deck. “What’s going on?” I screamed. “Thunder storm” said Scorch lightning struck the sails,which quickly lit aflame. “Everyone find a life boat” screamed someone. Zaraceda, Zandau, and Scorch jumped into a life boat. “Come on Zore” yelled Zaraceda. I ran for the life boat but got tripped. I was on the ground and a barrel (I’m guessing beer was in it at one time), rolled rite for me, I moved just in time avoiding the barrel. Before I knew it I was surrounded by fire, I looked up and saw that the mast was collapsing. I stood up but got knocked in the head and I flew into the water. My vision went dark and blurry, my mind went blank.




























CH 5


I wasn’t sure where I was. My mind had just come back to me. I opened my eyes. I saw the ocean; it wasn’t as blue as it was on the boat. Behind me was a tall building that looked some what like a light house. The beach was bright yellow and very warm. I’m not used to warm places. I wondered where I was. “Hello” I yelled. “Sup”. Ok I knew I didn’t say that, the voice came behind me so I turned around. “Hey how’s it going man”. I was confused he was speaking English but in a weird way, so I replied “good”. He looked weird he had blonde hair and a buzz cut. “So who are you?” I asked. “My name is Alex”. “What is this place Alex?” “Your on a small island where the Westfall lighthouse is, homie’, “so what is your name?” “Oh it’s Zore”. “Cool”. The way he spoke confused me alot he looked much older than me but younger than Zandau. I’m guessing he’s 20 or so. “So homie, how did you get here? I found you knocked out on my beach”. “Oh my boat caught fire and I guess I wasn’t able to get in a life boat in time”. “Then it hit me, where is Zandau, Zaraceda, and Scorch?” I thought, they must be at Stormwind. “Excuse me Alex, do you know where Stormwind is? I need to find my family Zandau, Zaraceda and Scorch.” “Ahhh man it’s been forever since I have been there. Yah its not to far from here, do you need to get there?” “Yah”. “Ill teleport us there but you got to pay me”. “I didn’t have much money just 12 silver coins, so I offered 5 silver coins”. “Will that do”?“Yo dog, I’ll take it”.
“So what do I do?” “Just stay still and I’ll make a portal hole then we just jump in”. while he was casting the spell his hands glowed a bright white. About a minute later I saw the hole. “Ok jump!” I closed my eyes and jumped.

























CH 6 Mystery Attacker.



As I opened my eyes, I saw many trees, kind of like Tedrasil but not as dark and much more green. The lanterns where a bright yellow and weren’t as attractive as Tedrasils. I then realized I was in a small town. Next to me was an Inn and the other side was a Blacksmith. The town looked deserted. Then I saw someone running out of the Inn, he looked like he was running from someone. As he ran out of the Inn, he collapsed. I observed him, he had a dagger stuck his back. Then I observed him more but, then got kicked in the back, I fell to the ground. I stood up but got punched into the wall of the Inn. I tried to fight back but got forced against the wall. He picked me up by the neck,I could hardly breath. I didn’t notice much of him, he had a red mask on and a dagger in his hand. “What do you want from me, I screamed!” He didn’t answer, he just took out his dagger and held it to my neck. I knew right then and there it was all over. I was fighting to get free but he was too strong. I knew I had to give up. I closed my eyes. Thoughts filled my mind about death. Then he let go I fell to the ground and the guy attacking me did too. I saw Alex a few feet away his hands glowed a bright red. The attacker stood up and Alex threw a fireball, the attacker did a back flip just missing the fireball. Alex’s hands glowed red again, the attacker jumped for Alex knocking him down, interrupting Alex’s spell. I didn’t know what to do. Alex fought the attacker but failed as the attacker threw Alex threw the Inn window. Glass shattered everywhere. The attacker took out his dagger, and jumped through the window. I followed, the attacker almost stabbed Alex but, I knocked him down by jumping on him, I fell with him onto a few chairs. He took out his dagger and stuck it into my arm, I screamed with pain. Blood drizzled down my arm. He picked me up and threw me onto a table, he jumped ready to kill me with a final blow but got hit by another one of Alex’s fireballs. Alex took out the attacker’s second dagger and stabbed it into his chest. “It is finished”. I cried in extreme pain as the dagger remained in my arm. Tears filled my eyes as blood soaked the table. Alex grabbed the dagger and took it out of my arm, I screamed. “It’s ok ,you will be all right”. I didn’t believe him. He rubbed my head saying some weird words. I instantly fell asleep.












CH 7 Stormwind



I woke up in a bed, the first time I have been in a bed for days. I was in a plain room made of concrete. I saw Alex he was next to me. “Finally your awake ,lil homie”.
I wanted to sit up but I was in to much pain, my arm hurt like it got blown off. ‘Who was that who attacked us?” I asked. “That was a Delfias.” “what’s Delfias?” “There’s a clan that kills people for there stuff and money, Very evil people basically.” “You look sad Zore.” In fact I was sad thoughts filled my mind that I would never see Zandau, Zaraceda ,or Scorch again. Tears filled my eyes and I actually began to cry. “What is it Zore, is something wrong?” “No it’s nothing I’m just worried that I’m never going to see my family again.” “You know how you told me your family’s names?” “yah, but what does that have to do with anything.” “Well I wanted to make you happy so I tracked them down.” The door flew open and Zandau ran threw the door followed by Zaraceda and Scorch. I was excited. I hugged Zandau. Tears of joy rolled down my cheek. We had made it to Stormwind.

[Liania]

i stopped when you couldnt spell stupid wrong.

but, wow, this is a perfect example of hacking the game, flying, AND becoming a GM on a live server.

[idusy-org]

i stopped when you couldnt spell stupid wrong.

Fixed

[Scarmaker]

Darnasis is spelt = Darnassus

[superjosh]

Darnasis is spelt = Darnassus

Why is every 1 correcting me?????

wellthanks for the corrections ill fix it

[Scarmaker]

Why is every 1 correcting me?????

wellthanks for the corrections ill fix it

Lol sorry its just a habit

[Enfeebleness]

but, we have the most purest of the pure blue water.

No comma needed after but, and doesn't make sence

were me and Zaraceda play.

Zaraceda and I

I’m a elf and 12 years old.

I'm an elf

Now my best friend Zaraceda is the same age as me,

same age as I am,

Like my dad his mom had died before we were born.

Like me, his mom...

His dad is interesting he uses magic a lot throwing fireballs and stuff like that.

His dad is interesting, he uses magic, a lot of throwing fireballs and stuff...

He is also an alcamist. He makes us lots of potations

That just made me lol

(which is what you do in alcamy)

Alchemy

some of those potations shrink us,

potions, yet again

http://dictionary.reference.com/browse/potations

now

Now

from me and everyone including Zaraceda.

from everyone, including Zaraceda, and I. (i believe)

So everyone calls him Scorch, Zaraceda just calls him dad.

Scorch; Zaraceda or Scorch, but Zaraceda


First paragraph done :P
I'de hate to be your LA teacher if she was picky on that junk :P

Lol sorry its just a habit

Lol, sorry, it's just a habit


Rofl XD

[Dizziness]

This is the stupidest post Ive seen on MMOwned. l2forum