Im starting to rap what do you guys think?

[zizzlfie]

Tell me what you think of my rapping and the lyrics. If you know how i can improve my rapping let me know nicely. I don't use a professional mic. I use a cheap $20 dollar mic.

YouTube - Death's angel by Zizzlfied

[Matador]

You mostly hit the beat, which puts you ahead of 90% of all other rap aspirants. If you really want to do it, you can get better easily.
The thing is, your rhymes are bad and many things with the flow are wrong. Get on a rapping forum, start reading posts of the big guys and after half a year of practicing get on a freestyle battle portal on the net - the active rappers of your city would burn you.
And most importantly, don't release your first recordings/texts/whatever you produce to public. Nowadays every kid with a headset somehow feels the urge to put their crap on the net which is one of those things that brings this music a bad reputation. You've got a good foundation! - write texts, record them, analyze them, together with a rapping friend maybe, make freestyling in your head a habit and start releasing your stuff to your social circle after a year or so at earliest. If you do it any other way, you'll either get flamed or the fake people who know nothing about music will kiss your ass.