Corrupted Terenas Menethil

[Darkraid]

Hello everyone. This is my first attempt on doing a script and I share it to you all for any FUN WoW servers. I will warn you further in this post.

STORY

Terenas Menethil, somehow was captured by the Will of Frostmourne and forced to kill anyone who tries to stop him from doing any disaster. Only fierce fighters who defeated The Lich King can stop him now. Even being corrupted by Frostmourne, he can't control him fully for not being possesed by The Lich King (Arthas). At a time, Corrupted Terenas Menethil will die and Terenas Menethil's spirit will rest in peace.

WARNINGS

-The boss hits like a truck (about 7k-11k) so my suggestion is a raid of 20+ players (T10) .
-Spawn him anywhere but add a Custom Graveyard further than his spawn location (try, if you're wiping, to get near the graveyard before he kills you or else you might taunt him when you revive) .
-His range is 15 yards so pay attention how you get near him.
-At Phase 2 he hits faster.

HELP

Script made by Darkraid with help from stoneharry at "Suicide Part" .

SCRIPT & SQL

[Lua] Corrupted Terenas Menethil - Script - Pastebin.com
[SQL] Corrupted Terenas Menethil - SQL - Pastebin.com

[Darkraid]

No post xD ? I really would appreciate any criticise ; suggestions so I can become an expert scripter ^^ .

[Terrorblade]

English mistakes, English mistakes everywhere.

[Darkraid]

Where? :-w I have the best marks in all school at English << .

[themuffin0]

I'll try and help. Assuming you're not a native english speaker, I'd say that your english is pretty good. Just going to try and fix some awkwardness while trying to maintain your original ideas.

"Welcome to your DEATH, champions! I have escaped from the Frostmourne's chains. I cannot live here forever but I need company there. I will make you a BIG favor if I kill you!"

Pretty sure that it's just "Frostmourne", never "the Frostmourne"
Second and third sentences are really weird sounding.

"Welcome to your DOOM, champions! I have escaped Frostmourne's grasp. It won't be long before it pulls me back, but I do like company..."

"You have failed me, champions! Let's find ourselves in Frostmourne's world."

Not really sure what the context of this quote is. The script wasn't that helpful.

"You have failed me, champions! You'll find yourselves in Frostmourne's world now!"

"I-I'm sorry, champions... for... my co-corrupted form."

All good.

"You, champions, truly are powerful so you could defeated The Lich King."

I'm assuming this fight is before the Lich King, so the past
tense is wrong.

"You, champions, truly are powerful! You may even defeat the Lich King."

"I'm l-losing contr-- NO, I can still FIGHT!!!"

Excess exclamation marks are for the internet.

"I'm l-losing contr-- NO! I can still FIGHT!"

"Finally, I have my full powers ready. But I lose control to this body so..."

Not entirely sure what you are trying to express here, so I can't be of much help.

[Darkraid]

In my imagination, Frostmourne was able to transform into a human being. Yet he doesn't have the same power like before so he haves to capture a spirit and force it to kill people so Frostmourne can absorb them.

"Welcome to your DOOM, champions! I have escaped Frostmourne's grasp. It won't be long before it pulls me back, but I do like company..."

I will edit with this one .

"You have failed me, champions! Let's find ourselves in Frostmourne's world."p

Well, I said "ourselves" because, Frostmourne with his current power, cannot control a spirit forever and Terenas knew that he will be absorbed, also was forced to say it that he wants to go there but with them (the fighters).

"You, champions, truly are powerful so you could defeated The Lich King."

Well this is the correct tense because of what I explained above.

"I'm l-losing contr-- NO! I can still FIGHT!"

I will edit with this one .

"Finally, I have my full powers ready. But I lose control to this body so..."

Those are, practically, Frostmourne's words. He got injured in this fight and he can no longer control Terenas as much as before. His full powers (that can be maintained in this body) makes him use it to kill the raid (and he survives but Terenas' spirit can no longer be captured) or fight with the raid normally (but he have chances to be eliminated by Terenas).

EDIT: Changes done!

[00MasterBlaster00]

Whats his model look like? Just the regular one or some corrupted, tentacles growing out of his back, form?

[Darkraid]

He's mind corrupted so no tentacles .

[thebigman]

Few tips,

if pUnit:GetHealthPct() == 85 then
the entire phrase means if the health is equal to 85%. What if he goes from 86 to 84 from a powerful attack? Id change it to
if pUnit:GetHealthPct() =< 85 then
if health is equal to or less then 85%.

The summon valkyr spell may or may not work and even if you do, you chose not to script him to do anything so he will be autoattacking, Script him imo.

also, On spawn id find a green necro looking aura for him to show he's corrupted.
corrupted body i think is a spell.

that and fix the english. Also the boss looks a bit boring. Spice up the phases a bit

[Darkraid]

I would like to test it but gotta repair my WoW Server. I think one file got damaged and have to reinstall or ask a friend to use it .

[thebigman]

well theres quite a few things you could do to make it better but since its your first you will learn the techniques in time.