[Rate]Work in Progress

[ChrisC]

ignore the watermark. What do you think of it. What should I add/remove?

[CarlosJ]

um cant see it to well because of the watermark to be honest. but from what i can see its preety simple and abstract which is kool but i think the borders just a bit to big and it needs something more on it, like those weird dotty things in the corner something like that larger on the sig with a kinda tech theme (loadsa tech brushes). i think then it will add a bit more to it so it stands out

[ChrisC]

No watermark here. Makes the grid and crosses visible.
A note for all who wonder. I make my own renders.

[Puff]

Not being mean but i dont like that render. Its clever but far too busy, Thats my main critic.

It needs brush work, its all harsh straights at the minute, and needs abit of flow.

Keep at it though

- Puff

[ChrisC]

Not being mean but i dont like that render. Its clever but far too busy, Thats my main critic.

It needs brush work, its all harsh straights at the minute, and needs abit of flow.

Keep at it though

- Puff

I just use the tools of 3ds max. It controls the shape. How is it for my first piece of work?

[CarlosJ]

ahh looks alot better now, thats the grids are that kinda extra thing i was hoping for just to split it up a bit.
regarding the render i agree with Puff it seems to have alot of hard lines and has to many layers overlapping each other. if you could make the render so it has less hard points and isnt in a 'bundle'. for your first piece though looks nice

[ChrisC]

I like teh render . Anything you think I should add or remove?

[marick626]

I like teh render . Anything you think I should add or remove?

The main problem I have with it is the border. I think you should take out the whiteish border. Another thing I dont like are the small white details you put in the corners, I understand its a digital type thing but I think if you are gonna put those in, put more stuff or lower their opacity a bit. I know that brush pack includes more stuff (I have used it before).

Thats preety much it, very easy to fix. I like the render though, nice job.

[ChrisC]

The main problem I have with it is the border. I think you should take out the whiteish border. Another thing I dont like are the small white details you put in the corners, I understand its a digital type thing but I think if you are gonna put those in, put more stuff or lower their opacity a bit. I know that brush pack includes more stuff (I have used it before).

Thats preety much it, very easy to fix. I like the render though, nice job.

You think lowering the opacity of it would help? The things in the corners weren't made with brushes 0o. I handmade them pixel by pixel. (Link the brush pack please)
How does the border look below?

[CarlosJ]

I like teh render . Anything you think I should add or remove?

lol sorry i didnt mean to dishearten you. dont get me wrong its preeti kool especially as its your first, i dont dislike it or anything but i was just giving my criticism on what i thought you could do to improve.

regarding the new border i think if it wasnt as thick it may look bit better?

[ChrisC]

How is the below?

[CarlosJ]

yeah personally i prefer that, btw i think the top border is thinner than the bottom border. regarding the render my comments on it where just so that the render would stand out more, with all the layers on top and under each other it doesnt let each individual part show as much imo.

[ChrisC]

7 pixel border all around. It's abstract. Individual parts don't show.

[CarlosJ]

7 pixel border all around. It's abstract. Individual parts don't show.

top is 5px btw (im preeti sure, just looks different size so i measured and got 7 for all but that), oki sorry i didnt know you couldnt show less layers on abstract pieces

[ChrisC]

top is 5px btw (im preeti sure, just looks different size so i measured and got 7 for all but that), oki sorry i didnt know you couldnt show less layers on abstract pieces

Fixed the border